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One way to reduce the problem of traffic congestion is by increasing the tax on private vehicles. Do you think this is a feasible solution?

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Nowadays, the population in cities is growing at an exponential pace, increasing the number of vehicles per person, which results in
traffic
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congestion
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. There is an opinion that by taxing private vehicles, the menace of
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congestion
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 can be solved.
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, I am not in agreement with
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 ideology, as
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 is not a permanent solution.
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 essay will embark upon the strategies to reduce
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congestion
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 in cities without levying hefty taxes on the general public.
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 with, Increment in the tax over the private ownership vehicles will cause discomfort middle-class people and they will stop using their private vehicles and turn to public transport, whereas,
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 will not impact rich people. Taxes may lead to a decrease in the overall number of a private
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 and which will show a reduction in
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. To cite an example, The Government of India had increased road tax on the new
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 in 2017 from 5% to 10%,
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 resulted in a reduction in 12% of new
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 purchases and increase in
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 of public transport.
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, by providing awareness to the general public about public transport and the use of private vehicles can result in curbing the menace of
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congestion
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. The government can develop wider roads, pavements, separate lanes for two-wheelers and planned cities will be helpful in the reduction of
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 jams. To cite an example, Chandigarh is a modern city with strict
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 rules and wide roads showed a streamlined flow of
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. To recapitulate, I disagree with the terminology of increasing tax on the private
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 to fight with
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, whereas the government can play a vital role by awareness and guidance to the general public for techniques to reduce
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.
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