The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows
describe
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describes
typical
daily demand for Correct article usage
the typical
electricity
in England in winter and summer. It Add a missing verb
is clearly
clearly seen
that the highest units of Add the auxiliary verb
has clearly seen
saw
electricity
at 21:00 about 48000. whereas
The lowest units of electricity
around
300 about 31000 Add a missing verb
are around
However
the demand for electricity
lower
than the daman for Add a missing verb
is lower
electricity
in winter. From 12 a.m
to 3 a.
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,a.m
m
the demand for electricity
in winter was
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apply
5000
. But , Change preposition
by 5000
next
3 hour
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hours
was decrease
dramatically Change the verb form
decreased
about
9000. From 6 to Change preposition
to about
15
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,15
was increase
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was increased
about
9000 and remain at 40000 . Change preposition
to about
Next
3 hours it was slight
increase Correct article usage
a slight
about
6000. Change preposition
of about
However
it decreased dramatically .In summer, from 12 a.Add a comma
,However
m
to 9 a.m
, it was decrease
slightly about 2000. Between 9 to Change the verb form
decreased
12
it Add a comma
,12
was
dramatically Unnecessary verb
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increase
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increased
repeatly
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repeatedly
about
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to about
Next
6 hours the highest without 20000 at 22 p.m
The pie chart describe
what Change the verb form
describes
electricity
is used in average
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the average
english
home. The highest purpose Change the capitalization
English
the
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is the
electricity
for heatin
rooms, heating war it hoyt of purpose Correct your spelling
heating
electricity
is used for . Second
it
ovens, kettles, Correct pronoun usage
apply
washing
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and washing
machine
with 17,59.the Fix the agreement mistake
machines
last
is lighting TV , radio and vacuum cleaner, foor
mixer , electric tools is some unit about 15%Correct your spelling
food
for
floor
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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