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In many cities, the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?

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The use of surveillance cameras as
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 deterrence is indeed being increased in many places around the world.
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 some argue that these measures violate people’s
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, I believe that the beneficial effects of increasing
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 using video cameras do outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand, the use of
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 cameras is considered an invasion of
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. Whether they are walking down the street, driving in their car or hanging out with friends, they are being monitored with cameras placed in public.
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 makes some people feel uncomfortable knowing that they are watched by someone.
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, it is not possible to completely protect public
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 systems from hackers. The value of CCTV information has increased, resulting in a higher risk from hackers which lead to
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 issues,
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 as images captured by CCTV distributed across the Internet.
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, I believe that using surveillance cameras is a positive measure. Catching criminals is one of the best benefits of
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 cameras in public places. If a
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 is committed in an area where a public surveillance camera has been set up, the chances of catching the criminal are much higher.
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, using video cameras is to
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 reduction by deterring potential criminals.
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, petty criminals
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 as shoplifters or pickpockets are less likely to commit crimes if they know that they are being watched. Since public safety is guaranteed, people’s fear of
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 can
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 be reduced, while their sense of
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 is created. In conclusion, I can understand why some people think that CCTV restrict their
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, but it seems to me that
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 brings more benefits than drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Surveillance cameras
  • Public safety
  • Deterrent
  • Evidence collection
  • Apprehend perpetrators
  • Public spaces
  • Invasion of privacy
  • Civil liberties
  • Abuse of power
  • Misuse
  • Cost implications
  • Monitoring
  • Maintenance
  • Essential services
  • Justice system
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