Some people believe that time spent on television, video and computer games can be beneficial to children. Others believe this has negative effects on the child. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There
is
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has been
an ever increasing use of technology, children are spending more time on television, video and computer games. It's often argued that
this
is a positive phenomenon while others disagree and think it will make children pay less attention
on
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to
study and outdoor activities.
This
essay agrees that spending time on electronic devices are an advantage to children.
This
essay will discuss both
point
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points
of view. It's clear that electronic devices not only gives children a better way to entertain themselves, but
also
have a huge
benifit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
to children. Wikipedia is a good example, children can learn whatever they want to learn on Wikipedia with very convenient operation by just typing what they want to know, and
also
video games
Accept comma addition
video, games
, children can learn other
countries's
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countries'
langueges
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
languages
,
practice
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practiced
reflexs
an automatic instinctive unlearned reaction to a stimulus
reflexes
reflex's
reflex
, some school
also use
Suggestion
also uses
video games to teach their students too.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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