Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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These days

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the amount of Violence is increasing in the media.While few of us debate that there is a dangerous impact on the humans because of the entertainment sources

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tv and computer games)

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others argue that

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in or at that place

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are

no damaging effects on the society.In my

opinion i

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opinion, I

opinion I

agree that Violence is escalating due to the media and it had significant effects on

people

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peoples

behaviour

Firstly

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It had great effects on children who want to replicate

every thing

all things

everything

at that age

with out

in absence of

without

proper guidance they will attract to violence and use it on others in

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the form

of fighting or

sexualy

harassing

some one

a human being

someone

and it will

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lead

to damage their career.

For

example on

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example, one

example one

of my street boy who see lots of commercial movies from his childhood and imitate the fights in school and it got him into the so much trouble and one day he injured his fellow classmate in college very badly and it led him into police case and

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it is

it's

abroad dreams are scattered

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People addicted to TV'S and PC games very badly.They can't see the real life and living in the virtual reality and try the moves that used in the games and it turns to hurting themselves and others

accidentaly

without advance planning

accidentally

accidental

.Due to the media mental stability of human is distracting and it had a serious consequence on the society. In conclusion

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Violence in the media

effects

the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion

affects

people

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person's

peoples'

peoples

behaviour and it is alarming to the society.They have greater

influance

a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc

influence

on children and adults who can move it into the bad direction and spoil themselves

also

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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

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Many young people today know more about international pop and movie stars than about famous people in the history in their country. Why is this? What can be done to increase young people's intesert in famous people in the history of their country?

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