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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#businesses #employees #lack #skills
Many companies find that co-workers from their own
compay
an institution created to conduct business
company
 are
missed
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missing
 some common interpersonal skills like working together.Due to
this
 situation there are a lot of reasons to have a connection with
this
 problem.Not only coming from ourselves but
also
 by the environment where people live. At
first point
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the first point
,
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,
people are too shy
of
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to
 talk or
may be
by chance
maybe
 make friend with
new person
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new people
a new person
.After a long time,
this
 habit makes us get used to it and we will not have more friends
also
 change for success.
For instance
,
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,
social pupils usually have more relationship in the community explaining for why they can have helping from everywhere.When we look back we all see that without their supporting you may not solve it
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 even
fail
undergo an emotional sensation or be in a particular state of mind
feel
full
 of it.After that environment where we live is quite important the way
humans'
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human
 growth.In fact
,
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,
self-fish make human to slow down their knowledge.If we work with self-fish people, we will not learn anything from them because they do not other guys better than them.Day by day working to
long
gain knowledge or skills
learn
 in
this
 environment may have a chance to impact our thinking too.
For example
, have you ever see any businesses include selfish persons
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
archive
 or maintain for a long period?.So the way human life and where they live are mostly
effect
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effective
 to their basic interpersonal skills. Facing with
this
 problem
,
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,
education system
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the education system
 should have
team
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teams
a team
 working
into
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in
 the study programme.By these
,
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,
children have
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to know how to cooperate with others.
Beside
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Besides
 saving time for companies to solve
unnecessary thing
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an unnecessary thing
the unnecessary thing
 and concentrate on giving more strategies in the company's future.
Soical
 activities
is
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are
 a good
example but
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example, but
also
more easy
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easier
 to approach young generation.
In contrast
,
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,
experienced
throught
all the way through
throughout
through
 a game is more realistic than
a
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an
 academic speaking.
Actually there
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Actually, there
 are enormous solutions which encourage our cooperative skills. In conclusion
,
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,
the more basic interpersonal skills we have a better
chances
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chance
 our
achivements
the action of accomplishing something
achievements
 will be earned.If it is missed by yourself, do not be scare to improve.One day you will thankful for what you
have done
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do
are doing
 today.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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