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Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion?

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Governments are looking forward to reduce traffic congestion through encouraging
bicycle
 use. I think ever growing traffic is too difficult to be solved by solely more emphasis on
bicycle
 promotion. Other methods are certainly required than to invest in making
bicycle
 a common transport.
Bicycle
Suggestion
The bicycle
A bicycle
 is unarguably an eco-friendly mode of transportation. Motor vehicles run on fuel while
bicycle
Suggestion
the bicycle
a bicycle
 is run through peddling it. Promoting
bicycle
 is perhaps an alternative to a car and motorcycle to control emission.
This
,
however
, has no profound impact on
attitude
Suggestion
the attitude
attitudes
 of those commuters who have to rely upon motor vehicles to reach
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
at
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in
on
 time. The problem with
bicycle
Suggestion
the bicycle
 is that it can never run as fast as a car or motorbike. In
this
 view, government is supposed to invest
on
Suggestion
in
 faster and
environment
Suggestion
environmentally
 friendly alternatives.
Majority
Suggestion
The majority
 of commuters will certainly prefer travelling
in
Suggestion
on
 high speed trains
over riding
having superior power and influence
overriding
 a
bicycle
 to get to their workplace. The cities where high speed trains are provided have a relatively
lower
Suggestion
low
 traffic on roads. To conclude, people will not substitute a car with a cycle, because there is no match between these two in terms of speed.
However
, it is possible that fast trains will encourage people to give up using their
motorvehicles
Suggestion
motor vehicles
.
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