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Culture and traditions change from generation to generation. Why does this happen? What can be done to change it?

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It is a well-established idea that the
culture
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 of numerous nationalities across the world is being altered, day in day out. There are some possible causes
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, a few remedies for tackling the problem are suggested. The advent of technology is accounted for many of the world-wide issues, one of which is the eradication of local traditions. Globalization, which is one of the consequences of implementing technology by people from all walks of life, raises awareness about various cultures.
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 of being informed of the lifestyles of other people, local people tend to pursue them.
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, the unique traditions of their own nation are likely to be replaced.
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, immigration has become increasingly ubiquitous, and as a consequence, many people are urged to abandon their own cultural values and get accustomed to the new ones. So, the
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 generation will not acquire adequate knowledge about their ancestors'
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. In order to preserve the cultures against the risk of eradication, it is vital for governments to take some serious measurements into account.
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, the promotion of local
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 by diverse programs is expected to exert a constructive influence.
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 during the particular events of the country lead to a sense of uniqueness.
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, people will become enthusiastic about respecting their own
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.
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,
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the authorities
 are required to enhance the standards of living in society in order to prohibit the vast immigration of locals. If more people remain in the country, more children are born to that
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. It is beyond dispute that in
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 circumstance, the survival of the
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 is more probable. To wrap up,
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 the technology, as well as poor life standards in some regions, exacerbates the risk of
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 change, increasing the awareness and providing better living conditions
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 among the possible practices for slowing down the process.
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