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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Punishment
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 is the act of imposing a penalty on someone
as a result
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 of his or her wrong doings. I am strongly
agreed
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agree
 that
punishment
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 is necessary to keep children under
control especially
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control, especially
 when they start to learn the world around them at an early age. In ancient times, many methods of punishments were used by parents as well as teachers to teach their children to learn good
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and to prohibit from certain acts.
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punishment
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 helped children to adapt right choices and reject wrong ones even at
very early age
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a very early age
. At present, the tradition of
punishment
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 is continuing in almost all the societies.
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, the ways and techniques of
punishment
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 are changed greatly from hard ones to soft ones and from physical to verbal. In developed countries, there are child protection rules and both parents and teachers are bound to follow their rules.
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, it is important to note that both parents and teachers have to use soft punishments for children like minimizing their sports time, reducing their pocket money, keep their breaks on for studies, etc.
in
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In
 order to keep children on right track. By doing so, we will definitely have an advanced generation of
children in
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children, in
near future
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the near future
 who will be wise enough to choose right options for their future life.
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Hence I
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Hence, I
 am strongly agreed that parents and teachers have the authority to use
punishment
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 as a correction tool for children, but they have to ensure that any
punishment
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 given to a child must not affect his or her physical or mental capacities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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