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how does the map describe the change of village park ?

how does the map describe the change of village park ?
#change #village #park
The map illustrates the
on
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a
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apply
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village
park
throughout
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over
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 10 years.
Overall
,
village
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the village
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park
 has significant changes. Some
area
 was rebuilt
more
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apply
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bigger and something appeared. As the island has been developed
more
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bigger for people,
which
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apply
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use to play like tennis court,
foodball
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football
 pitch. The
area
 for children was divided
to
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into
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soft
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the soft
a soft
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 play
area
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areas
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.
Car
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The car
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park
also
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has also
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rebuilt
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been rebuilt
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, it
filled
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was filled
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 with 20 cars
in
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apply
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10 years ago but now the number increase
50
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to 50
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 cars On the southwest of
village
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the village
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park
,
picnic
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a picnic
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area
 was
contructed
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constructed
 under
car
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a car
the car
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park
. Opposite there,
the
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a
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 pond was developed,
which
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and
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 people use boating in here.
Besides
,
woods
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the woods
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was
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apply
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dissapear
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disappear
 and
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the rebuit
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rebuit
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rebuilt
 café. On the west of
village
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the village
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park
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,park
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 the toiler
also
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was also
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 added for people. And
cycle
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the cycle
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 path was
buit
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built
 around
village
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the village
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park
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words village, park, area with synonyms.
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