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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society?

#students #science #subjects #university #countries #effects #society
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Two principal factors contribute to the common disinterest in
science
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 subjects.
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, those subjects are often challenging and require a lot of diligence as well as a great deal of patience and intelligence. The
number
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 of researches that an average Biology student has to do is more than other subjects with
higher level
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higher levels
a higher level
 of both difficulty and commitment, which discourages many students from choosing
science
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 as their majors.
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, employment opportunities in
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 particular field are limited and extremely competitive.
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 a huge amount of time and effort is spent on
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 study at school, there is still little chance for them to get a job after graduation. Society greatly suffers from the scarcity of human resources in
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 fields. Apparently, as the
number
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 of
science
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 students is insignificant, other majors
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 as business or economics become prevalent,
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 the imbalance in
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the future workforce
. In fact, competitiveness increased due to too many degree holders of the same expertise pushes a worrying
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 of graduates to the verge of unemployment. Another problem is the shortage of
science
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 professionals as qualified employees are low in
number
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. Unless more students decided to study
science
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 at university, eventually we would have to face a major human resource crisis. In conclusion, hurdles regarding some strict requirements of
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 subjects and employment opportunities
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factor
 in many students not choosing
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 subjects to study, and there are serious problems arising from
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 situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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