2 year ago, Samsung declared that their repair service can be provided in the every corner of India. They choose to deliver this news by story telling on social media. Thus, they make the following video and posted it on YOUTUBE.

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Samsung is

specially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

known for android phone,

however

also

manufactures TVs, tablets,

smartwatches

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smart watches

, virtual reality headsets, home

theater

a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented

theatre

and audio, desktop computers, laptops, monitors, printers, memory devices, home appliances and security/monitoring systems. With

this

wide range of products sold all over India and worldwide, they have to provide

repair

service

Hence

, they start providing

repair

service

all over the India even if it hills area, villages or any other area. Providing a

repair

facility by a company in every corner of

country

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the country

is a great achievement,

although

company

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companies

the company

have to advertise it, so people should know about

this

service

. Samsung came up with

idea

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the idea

an idea

of telling a unique

story

which just so heart melting and emotional. To make it more emotional they choose

orphanage

as their clients and that

orphanage

include children with disabilities and

twist

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a twist

the twist

at the end. About the

story

Accept space

In the

story

, someone call to Samsung customer care about the problem they were facing with Samsung tv and they were requesting to fix it before evening because of some particular reason.

Through

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Though

that was a hill region, technician reached there and fixed the tv just few minutes before they want to.

then

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Then

that lady rings a bell and call children

to come

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come

over. At that

time audience

Accept comma addition

time, audience

realize

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realized

that

place

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the place

was actually an

orphanage

with disable children and everyone was waiting for a singing show because one girl from that

orphanage

went to that show for singing competition and they all want to

listen

perceive (sound) via the auditory sense

hear

her performance. Samsung tried to show that their

service

and products will never let you down. Impact

Accept space

After

this

story

came out in market Samsung just hit the India digital market because electronic device somehow need

repair

at a certain time in life and Samsung became the

first

origination that provide

repair

customer

service

in every part of

country

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the country

. It shows the major impact when people found an emotional attachment with

this

story

. User targeted

–

Accept space

Samsung targeted each and every person that

own

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owns

a Samsung product in any region of

nation

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the nation

nations

because they know that electronic device get disturbed even with small mis happenings.

Sun Oct 20 2019

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