Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

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Suggestion
It
is argued that corporations should be compelled to give a certain proportion of their executive level roles to females, given that over half of the workforce are women.
This
essay agrees with that statement because women are capable of doing a
job
at the same level as a man, and girls are currently outperforming boys on many university courses. In many fields, women can do a
job
as excellent as men. Those days are all gone now, when men were associated with physically demanding
job
and women cooked at home. Technological advancement has made everything easy, so that women can do the jobs which used to be only men did,
such
as bus drivers and airplane pilots.
As a result
, companies should not pick men over women to fill in high-level positions.
For example
, almost 69% of bus drivers in London are females, and there has never been accident involving them. Females are currently getting higher grades in most university courses. How well a man or woman does at the university is normally the deciding factor in getting a top graduate
job
, so it is only fair that women should get more of these positions. Even previously male dominated fields,
such
as law and medicine, now see women in the ascendency and they should
therefore
be rewarded with top roles.
For example
, females recently outperformed males for the
first
time in law in the U.K. Universities. In conclusion, men should not be given the majority of high-level jobs in businesses because women can perform at the same level as men and
also
do better academically.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Affirmative action
  • Meritocracy
  • Quotas
  • Glass ceiling
  • Legal enforcement
  • Tokenism
  • Voluntary measures
  • Career progression
  • Representation
  • Workforce parity
  • Backlash
  • Historical imbalances
  • Corporate governance
  • Inclusive practices
  • Boardroom dynamics
  • Gender norms
  • Unconscious bias
  • Regulatory frameworks
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