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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Job
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 is the way of earning. We get the
salary
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 to get our
job
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 done. Big
salary
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 is not much more important than
job
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satisfaction
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, but there are exceptions.
Salary
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 is
a
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an
 important part
in
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of
 any
job
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. We perform our
job
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 to get the
salary
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. Without
job
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satisfaction
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 a person
can not
can not
cannot
 perform well to get
the high
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the highest
higher
highest
the higher
salary
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.
Job
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satisfaction
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 is an integral part of
performance
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the performance
. A good performance helps to get a person a big amount of money.
For example
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, CEO of Google Sundar Pichai rejected excessive
salary
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. There are numerous examples of IT employees who left their high-salaried jobs to satisfy their dream. They quit their jobs because they were not satisfied with what they were doing.
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, we do have exception where people do not care about their
satisfaction
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 just for the handsome
salary
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. We often see
this
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 picture in the government sectors. Where people love their
salary
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.
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, most of the bank
staffs
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staff
are always complaining
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is always complaining
 about their hectic
job
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 of customer dealing. And they never protest for their
job
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 role
instead
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 of
salary
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 hike.
Job
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satisfaction
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 is a way to get huge amount of money
instead
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 of chasing big
salary
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 with dissatisfaction.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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