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Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects this have on animal life and human society?

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One of the most important
worriness
having knowledge of
awareness
 of biosphere fans is about pollution of water world that it has very serious bad effects
in
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on
 human life, definitely.
Although
,
many of manufactures
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many manufactures
 use the filtration devices for sewage, but apparently, too much of their pollutions, transfer to the rivers or lakes in some countries.
Also
 the chemical particulars of domestic sewer are the matter which must be concerned about contamination of waters in earth mother.
On the other hand
, emission of oil, from oil tankers is very dangerous for
gulfs
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gulf
gulf's
 waters as basic locations of oil facilities.
Furthermore
, we have to mention the plastic, as
most important material
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the most important material
 which today, is the biggest issue about pollution of waters. The plastics can hurt the fishes Biosystems.
For example
, the people found a
wale
a pocket-size case for holding papers and paper money
wallet
 with 700 KG plastic parts in his stomach. By the way, the water taint brings the sort of illnesses and diseases for human societies. Afterwards, with animal varieties extinction, the danger of famine and food shortage is
increase
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increasing
for
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in
 humans and animals. Overall, it
is seem
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seems
 that we have to noticed to
this
 vital matter, of
course for
Accept comma addition
course, for
 now and future living of our after generations
in
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of
 planet earth.

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