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Nowadays we can see definite signs of surplus production in almost every industry sector, and this is leading to environmental damage. What are some possible solutions to this situation?

#signs #surplus #production #industry #sector #damage #situation
Some problems; river pollution, waste disposal and sanitation are localised issues that can be effectively managed by the local government’s timely actions. At the same time, it is the responsibility of the local authority to educate their own people about pollution, conservation of
energy
 and the importance of protecting the nature by recycling. Local residents should be responsible for their actions. Apart from
this
, the government can introduce better public transport, aiming to help reduce gas emissions must be done domestically. The
first
 and foremost thing is that school children are educated regarding the significance of conservation of
energy
 and various methods are available for
this
. Apart from
this
, unsold and remaining food items should be distributed to needy people.
Similarly
, food wastes are composted properly and can be used as a fertilizer to replenish the quality of soil. The local government must educate their own people and encourage them to use renewable sources of
energy
: solar power, tidal
energy
 and wind mills.
Additionally
, instruct them to use products which are environmentally friendly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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