Some people believe that employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress, but they should be concerned about the quality at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Obviously,
this
is true that libraries cannot store all the physical form of the boos due to
lacks
Suggestion
lack
of space available,
threfore
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
therefore
, digitalised libraries are the best way to resolve
this
issue effectively. Apart from
this
, the printed books put a great amount of strain on the environment and the natural resources,
expecially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
, trees are cut, for making row materials to prepare
paper
Suggestion
the paper
a paper
papers
.
Availabilty
Suggestion
Availability
of the internet definitely attracts millions of
younsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
to the library and reading habit once again since the digital world has filled with
abundance
Suggestion
an abundance
of knowledge and information.
However
, there are others, who consider
paper
Suggestion
the paper
based library is the best since they like to experience the physical form of books
:
Accept space
:
well designed cover, quality papers, and smell of the books.
Additionlly
Suggestion
Additionally
, they argue that, many newspapers and periodicals do not have
digital version
Suggestion
a digital version
the digital version
,
therefore
, there is no real requirements of having an e-library.
By contrast
, if
any
Accept comma addition
any, this
this
kind of
placeintroduced
Suggestion
place introduced
,
Accept space
,
this
would turn library into the internet cafe, which many people do not like to happen.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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