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Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#organizations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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Some companies think that dressing formally is a must for their
workers
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workers, however
however
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 others believe that
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quality
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the quality
 of
work
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 is more crucial than appearance
.
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This
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 essay will discuss my strong belief that they are both equally important. Dressing smartly will help the organization gain a better reputation and may actually have a great role in the success of a business.
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, when customers, suppliers or managers from other
companies visit
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companies, visit
, they should be impressed by
details
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the details
 in the physical appearance of the organization, including how neat the workforce
look
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looks
, to be motivated to
work
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 with them. Professionalism is
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 reflected when a formal
dress
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 code is applied as it aids controlling how employees look. I think workers should
dress
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 appropriately even if there is no
dress
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 code.. As long as it does not have a negative impact on the
quality
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 of
work
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, I believe that employees should wear smart clothes in the workplace.
Quality
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 of
work
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 done by an employee should be his priority. Focusing on the tasks and challenges he has received will not only help him become a better version of
himself but
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himself, but
 it will
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 improve the firm’s output and profits.
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 the business should make sure that the employees’ main concentration is to achieve their goals and the
organizations
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organization's
 objectives as well.
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, when the worker is well trained and experienced, less mistakes will be made and the business’s costs will
then
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 decrease. So if the business discovered that putting a
dress
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 code will distract them and affect the
quality
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 of their
work
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, they might give the “dressing smart”
rule
rotary motion of an object around its own axis
roll
 up. To conclude, I believe that dressing smartly and the
quality
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 of
work
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 has a critical impact on each other. So as long as
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 influence is a positive one,
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 it’s not wrong to apply both.

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