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Many people work from homeusing modern technology today. Some people think that only the workers benefit from this not the employers. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #technology #workers #benefit #employers
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Technology in present era has shown tremendous growth, especially in
working culture
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the working culture
 of
corporate world
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the corporate world
.
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Nowadays
, most of the companies offer
work
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 from
home
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 facility to their employees.
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 find
this
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 technique is more beneficial for employees than employers. There
are numerous reasons of
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are numerous reasons
 why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think that
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 from
home
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 method is more advantageous to employees.
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, professionals get a chance to
work
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 in their own comfort zone. They select best furniture according to their customized needs which may not be an option at
workplace
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the workplace
.
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, working from
home
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 saves
alot
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a lot
 of travel time as well as commute cost. One needs not to travel for several miles daily to
work
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. To illustrate, I, myself, save $200 monthly from commute cost due to the
work
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 from
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 option.
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,
this
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 technique gives employees a provision to keep an eye on their house while working which reduces the chances of theft and robbery.
Parallely
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Parallel
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, they can take care of their wards more
effeciently
with efficiency; in an efficient manner
efficiently
 with
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work
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 from
home
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 option.
On the other hand
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, employers get few advantages from
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 working style.
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, employers need not to bother about the logistics requirements of
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employees which
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employees, which
 saves them
alot
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a lot
 of bucks.
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, employers see a better performance from
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 employees. These members do not get exhausted because they do not commute to the workplaces which make them happy and more concentrated towards their
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.
However
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, there are some drawbacks for employers of
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 method. They
can not
can not
cannot
 monitor their employees 24*7 and
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,
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 productivity may get affected.
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, sometimes team interaction becomes so difficult as employees are not gathered physically
at
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in
 one centralized location.
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,
this
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 system may not prove advantageous
for
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to
 the employers. After considering all pros and cons of
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home
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 technique of
modern world
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the modern world
, I
comclude
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
concluded
 that
this
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 method is more beneficial to employees rather than the employers.

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