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Science will soon make people live up to 100 or even 200 years. Some believe this is a good thing while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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From the seas to the deserts, wild animals face the ongoing threat of extinction. According to some people's perspective, the modern world has no place for them,
therefore
 no efforts should be made to save them. I completely disagree with
this
 approach as protecting wildlife is
also
 beneficial for human beings. The most significant reason to protect wild animals is that they help in maintaining the ecosystem of the earth, without them the human race would be jeopardised.
This
 is because they contribute in various
For example
, the waste products from wild animals are useful for growth of flora and fauna, which is used by human beings for their nutritional needs and other activities
such
 as creating various useful oils and medicines.
In addition
 to that, the wildlife is
also
 a centre of attraction for several tourism places, which has the effect of boosting the economy and creating jobs where there
otherwise
 may be none.
For instance
,

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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