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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the changes in export earnings for a country in different categories from 2015 to 2016, measured in billions of dollars.
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, it is crystal clear that all
earning
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earnings
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 experienced rises except gems and jewellery, which experienced a moderate drop. The majority
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of earning
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earning
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earnings
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 came from petroleum
products
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 and engineered goods,
on the other
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hand
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 agricultural
products
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 and textiles contributed the lowest income. The main export was petroleum
products
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, which went 61
billion
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 in 2015 and after a year it became around 63
billion
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 (
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an increased
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increased
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only
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 3%).The
second
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 highest earning category was
the
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apply
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engineered goods. In 2015, it was below 60
billion
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,
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however
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 in 2016
earning
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earnings
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 from
the
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engineered goods
had
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increased sharply and accounted for around 62
billiob
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billion
dollar
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. In a year it rose 8.5% . Compared to these two exports, other
products
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was
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 much lower. Gems and jewellery , the only export to decrease , went down 5.18% from 43
billion
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 to 41
billion
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. There was
very
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 small change in agricultural
products
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, only 0.81% rose
up
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from 31
billion
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 to slightly above 31
billion
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.
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, there was a significant change in textiles, it grew
up
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 15.2% from 26
billion
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 to 32
billion
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 in a year

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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