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Employers should focus on personal qualities over qualifications and experience when choosing someone for a job. To what extent do you agree with this?

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It is often considered by many that while recruiting an
employees
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employee
, the
company
 should consider personal qualities
such
 as
person
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persons
a person
the person
people
 who have good
team
work
 ideas and excellent communication skills which are useful to raise the productivity of the
company
,
instead
 of focusing on degree certificates and years of experience.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 completely agree with the statement.
To begin
, there are
number
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a number
 of reasons to argue that personal skills are
indespensible
not to be dispensed with; essential
indispensable
 while recruiting an employee to an organization's.
Firstly
, workers who have good
team
work
 qualities would be more advantageous.
in
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In
 other words
,
Accept space
,
 a good
team
work
pave
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paves
 the way for better decisions and leads to achieve more
productivity which
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productivity, which
 helps companies to grow at
higher level
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a higher level
 and
also
 boost the economic status of the country.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by Infosys foundation shows that
team
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
work
 is the key
for
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to
thier
of them or themselves
their
 success.
Thus
,
person
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a person
the person
 who
have
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has
 personal skills like good
team
work
 would certainly
beneficial
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benefit
 for the
company
.
Secondly
, personal
qualities including
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qualities, including
 good communication skills would better
to consider while
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consider, while
consider while
 conducting job interview.
This
 is to say that,
this
 helps employees
to achieve
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achieve
 their target with no time because nowadays most of the jobs require a person having good rapport which leads them to reach their goals.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by a pharmaceutical
company
 in Bangladesh reported that a medical representative with excellent interpersonal relationship with
medical practitioner
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a medical practitioner
the medical practitioner
 resulted 100 percent success in
thier
of them or themselves
their
 job.
Therefore
, rather than qualifications and experiences
,
Accept space
,
 companies should focus on personal skills which are useful tool for achieving goals. To conclude, when companies or any organization's recruiting people for a job, they must pay attention to workers personal skills
such
 as communication skills and
team
work
 which are
basic tool
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basic tools
the basic tool
a basic tool
 to boost
countries economy
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the country's economy
country's economy
 and productivity of the
company
 rather than considering academic marks sheet and experiences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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