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Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company while other think that employees should be involved in the decision making process too. Discuss both view give your opinion.

#people #managers #decisions #company #employees #decision #process
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company
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 may have the best product, the most competitive prices, the best workforce and the best mangers. Certain individuals consider that employees alone
can not
can not
cannot
 take decisions only managers should make decisions in the
company
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, while other reckon that employees should be involved in the
decision
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 making as employees are main
part
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 of
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company
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the company
. The managers are more quality than other employees. They are educated in management skills and are trained to handle difficult complications in the
company
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. A well trained person easily know in which
decision
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 they gain profit.
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,
decision
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 making is an activity which requires merely the selected few managers and owners because, they think about
company
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 's goals, aims, objectives, policies and conditions. Future, only the top managers know the trade secrets of a
company
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.
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, the
work
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go
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goes
 through by employees. An
employee
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An employee
Employee
 who does the same activity
everyday
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every day
 is a better judge and
decision
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 maker.
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,
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,
they give divergent notion because they obtain knowledge when they do
work
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.
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, they perform better when they take
part
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 in
decision
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 making. What is more, they know
consumers demands
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the consumers' demands
consumers' demands
 and what need of improvement. They have more responsibility
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 they do
work
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 better way. According to my perception, when
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company
Suggestion
a company
the company
make
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makes
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decision
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the decision
a decision
decisions
then
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 manager and employers should be involved that time and they give their opinion and they feel
part
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 in the
company
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. What is more, employees are more motivated to
work
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 harder. Wrong
decision
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 taken by the management can have a negative impact on the workers. If they are
part
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 of the
decision
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 making process, they will be able to make suggestions. To conclude, employees should include in the
decision
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 making process, while the organisation does not have to discuss all the vital
deets
the specified day of the month
dates
 with them, they should at least allowed to make
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decision
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a decision
decisions
the decision
.
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