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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. What extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
believes
 that sticking onto same
job
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 which they have been doing is a satisfying
career
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life
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 while, few others think that shifting jobs are more fulfilling in a
career
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life
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. I agree
to
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with
 the latter where people think that shifting
job
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 is much satisfying than doing
same
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the same job
job
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. There are few people who
switch
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 their
job
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 more often which helps them to gain a good
career
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growth
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.
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 to
a
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an
attian
a professional person authorized to practice law; conducts lawsuits or gives legal advice
attorney
 a good
growth
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 it is possible only by when one is open to new
oppertunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
.
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, now-a-days youngsters frequently
switch
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 their
job
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 because they always seek for a positive
growth
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 in their
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
life
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 which can help them for a new better
job
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 and be the best they can.
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,
Accept space
,
changing jobs
can broadens
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can broaden
ones
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one's
one
horizone
the line at which the sky and Earth appear to meet
horizon
horizons
. As switching
job
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 will allow them to understand and learn new culture and different
statergies
an elaborate and systematic plan of action
strategies
 which companies follow
at
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in
 a unique manner at different
workplalce
a place where work is done
workplaces
.
Accept space
.
For instance
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, people who
switch
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 from one company to another, have to accept that particular
statergies
an elaborate and systematic plan of action
strategies
 and work style which the company follows. Learning and accepting new norms helps the individual to build up a positive
growth
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 in their
worklife
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work life
.
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,
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,
I feel people who
does
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do
 the same
job
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 end up having a stunted
growth
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 in their
career
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life
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 as they are not aware
to
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of
 the new tactics what new companies follows.
For example
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, people who work with the same
job
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 might have many years of
experience but
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experience, but
 they have limited knowledge
on
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of
 the new tactics what other upcoming companies follow.
This
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 can not bring positive
growth
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 in their
career
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life
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. To conclude, people who
switch
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 jobs have a more
statisfying
providing abundant nourishment
satisfying
 work
life
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 as it allows a
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
growth
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 in
career
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 and
broadens
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broaden
ones
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one's
one
horizone
the line at which the sky and Earth appear to meet
horizon
horizons
.
Although
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 sticking to one
job
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 can bring a stunted
growth
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 than a positive
growth
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