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A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc.). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The
government
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have
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has
an
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a
 main obligation to build defence service and develop urban infrastructure like roads, water supplies and waste recycling. All other services like education, health and social security should be
runned
move fast by using one's feet, with one foot off the ground at any given time
run
 by
private company
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a private company
private companies
 or the social community. State's defence is an important thing that should be
country
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 have to
built
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build
 and protect their people from
enemy
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enemies
the enemy
. Strong
country
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 will
makes
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make
 good ambience, which is
give
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given
 effect to the development of the economy. Infrastructure of transportation, water supplies and waste disposal have to designed and regulated by the
government
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. Both services
should be provide
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should be provided
 by the
government
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, because it affects to all people's need, whereas all other services are given to
private or individuals
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individuals or private
. Private and community are taken a role and involved to develop their
country
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. So, the development a
country
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.
On the other hand
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think
the all services that
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that all the services
 related to
people
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peoples'
 needs should be taken over by the
government
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 and made
an
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a
compulsary
required by rule
compulsory
 to do
its
the thing named or in question
it
. Because it
have been
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has been
had been
is
was
 responsibility to serve their people who had
choosed
a person who is being chased
chased
caused
 them. Especially, education and health should be
given attention more
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given more attention
 than the other services. Smart and healthy people will build their
country
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 significantly, either in
physics
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physical
 or mental development. The strength of a
country
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 depend
to
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on
 the condition of the people. The Inside defence have to
built
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build
firstly
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, before the outside's.
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