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The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#value #country’s #exports #categories #percentage #change #category #summaries #information #features #comparisons
Bar
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 chart
is illustrate
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country's
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the country's
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 export values
in
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from
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 2015 to 2016 and
also
percentage
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the percentage
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 change in each category
exports
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of exports
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 in
same
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the same
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 years.
Majority
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The majority
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 of export earnings are from Petroleum and Engineered goods.In 2016 Petroleum and Engineered goods value are by increased by 3% and 8.5. Compared to
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Gems and jewellery has been
decrease
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 by 5.18% in 2016
as
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from
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 a value of $43
billions
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billion
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 to 40
billions
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billion
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.When
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come
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 to
the
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apply
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Agriculture products
was
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manitained
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maintained
 very lower earnings in both years but it has little growth of 0.8% .
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 Textiles was in
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lowest
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the lowerst
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lowerst
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lowest
 range in
past
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the past
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 year
in
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with
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approximately
approximate
approximatly
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approximately
 value of $31 billion and increased by 15.24%
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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