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The consumption of world’s resources is increasing dangerous rate. What are the causes and solutions?

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The depletion of consuming natural resources at an accelerated speed is a matter of grave concern since it has given birth to several problems in the world.
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, these issues can be resolved by taking some effective remedial steps. The reduction in the green cover has had a negative effect on earth’s weather conditions. To elaborate, forests help to maintain the temperature of earth. The cutting down of trees at a fast pace for fulfilling human’s greed has created a climate imbalance and the earth’s average temperature has risen by 2 degree Celsius in the
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 ten years. One of the biggest consequences of global warming is that our summers are getting hotter and hotter.
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, because of the depletion of fresh
water
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 resources, people are now forced to buy drinking
water
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. The poor and the weaker sections of the society are the worst hit by the
water
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 crisis.
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, many people are dying due to lack of drinking
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 in African states and several others are left with only contaminated
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 for their daily use. Depleting oil resources
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 have had a negative impact on the automobile industry, which relies almost wholly on oil for its operation. In conclusion,
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 the fast paced consumption of natural resources has directly influenced the climate of the earth, the collaborative efforts of governments, scientists and the public can reduce the impact.
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