In many countries senior positions have higher salaries compared to those of young workers of the same company. Some people think this isn’t justified. Do you agree or disagree?

it
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It
is irrefutable that nowadays there is
lot
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a lot
of difference between the salaries of youngest and oldest workers.In many countries, most of younger earn less
salary
as compared to
older person
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an older person
older persons
the older person
older people
.
As a result
, they are dissatisfied with their
work
.
but
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But
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
personally think that if
person
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a person
people
the person
take full concentration on their
work
,
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,
then
it could be able for high pay.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
,
salary
should be given according to
work
.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am partly agree
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partly agree
have partly agreed
with
this
view.
let's
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Let's
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will
discussed
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discuss
in
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
. There are many factors
influence
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influencing
this
view.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
and foremost, in these days all the
work
are depend
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is depending
on computers.
now
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Now
technology growing very fast.
however
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However
, many older persons have no more knowledge about computer skill.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
,
firstly they
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firstly, they
learn about procedures.
after
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After
that they able to do
work
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the work
.
while
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While
younger are furnished with
these skill
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these skills
.
they
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They
can be easy to understand the
work
.
secondly
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Secondly
, they help to improve the productivity of the
company
.
along
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Along
with
this
, younger will the future of
company
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the company
because they have huge ideas about how to increase the
profitivity
of the organization.
also they
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Also, they
Also they
get a chance to improve their strength.
if
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If
they have not paid according to
work
,
then
they will definitely to moved other
company
for their better future and
salary
whereas, they are satisfied with their
work
and pay.
On the contrary
, senior level
work
always get
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always gets
high
pay
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paid
paying
.
here
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Here
it doesn't matter,
this
person
have
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has
to know about the
work
.
for
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For
instance, the responsibility of a supervisor to check the
work
which was done by the lower level employee and
also
it has
duty
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a duty
the duty
to encourage the staff to
work
hard and expand the image of
company
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the company
a company
.
but
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But
they received
high
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a higher salary
higher salary
higher salaries
salary
than younger.
in
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In
this
case, most of the younger employee
turn
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turns
to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
company
where they received more pay.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, the
company
production only based on junior
employees
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employees'
employee's
employee
efforts because they are more active, skilled and beneficiary rather than older.
now
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Now
most of
company
prefer
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prefers
to arrange younger employee for their
company
. To recapitulate, a pen
down saying
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down, saying
that all employees are able to get the
salary
according to their
work
hard
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harder
.
those
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Those
people who give the full intention for the
progress
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progress, then
then
they will be paid
high
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high salaries
salary
.
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.
however
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However
, it doesn't
matter it
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matter, it
is older or younger.
always
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
Always
analysis the
work
ability.

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