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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter ---Explain why you would like the job ----Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ -----Say how you would spend your free time while in Australia.

#advertisement #australian #magazine #someone #six #months #year #child #parents #---explain #job #----give #person #-----say #time #australia
Dear Sir/ Madam. I wish to apply for a position you published in
Australian
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an Australian
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 magazine seeking
for
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apply
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a nanny for your
six year old
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six-year-old
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 daughter. I would love the job because am fund of young ones and it will give me an opportunity to explore Australia. I have
broad
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a broad
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 knowledge of attaining to the need of children
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 Am suitable for the job as a paediatric nurse in a renowned hospital with 5 years
experience
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of experience
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 and have been exposed to different kinds of infant disease. I have worked excellently as a Nanny for one year. Am exceptional and
hard working
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hard-working
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, exceeding client
expectation
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expectations
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. The experience and
skill
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skills
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i
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 acquired will help me to be outstanding. To visit Australian beach has been my desire, so my spare time can be used for that. Having all these qualities, you will find me suitable to take care of your ward. Am looking forward to a favourable response from you. If you want to contact me, [email protected] is my email address. Yours faithfully Gift AU

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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