The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph represents the proportion of individuals
which
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are living in urban
areas
. The
grapch
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graph
depicts the evolution of the
porportion
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proportion
during a 100 years
study
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of study
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, taken in 6 different
areas
of the globe,
such
as
,
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Africa, Asia, Europe, Latin America/Caribbean, North America and Oceania.
Overall
, it is
striking
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evident an increasing tendency in
percentage
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the percentage
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of
population
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the population
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in urban
areas
, whilst some
areas
experienced
it
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apply
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with
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a steady or sharp
increase
.
Firstly
, in 1950 Africa and Asia were the continents
who
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which
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showed just 15% and 17%, respectively.
Although
both have experienced a sharp
increase
by
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of
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almost 50% , both regions
still
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are still
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the ones with the
leasts
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least
percentages. Meanwhile, Latin
American
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America
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/Caribbean
have
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has
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experienced a sharp
increase
of
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in
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population
in urban
areas
. In 1950, the continent had less than 45% of
population
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the population
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living in cities,
while
in 2050 is expected a percentage equal to 80%.
Therefore
, in 2050 will be sharing
the
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first place, as a continent 89%-90% of
population
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the population
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in
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is in
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cities, with North America
who
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testifyied
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testified
a steady
increase
betwenn
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between
1950 and 2050.
Secondly
, Europe jumped to
the
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third
place
while
experiencing a gradual
increase
by
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of
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33% of
population
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the population
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in urban
areas
.
To sum up
, it is common to associate
the
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population
growth with their fixation in urban
areas
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, population, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban areas
  • population density
  • economic development
  • historical urbanization
  • trends and outliers
  • urbanization levels
  • socio-economic implications
  • environmental impact
  • urban living
  • global trend
  • development strategies
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