You recently bought an item of clothing from a shop. You discovered that it had a fault and returned it to the shop for replacement or refund. However, the assistant told you that this was against the store's policy. Write a letter to the store manager

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Dear Mr Mallik,

This

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letter is regarding the recent purchase I did in your

store

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and found a defect after coming home.So request your assistance for refund. So, On

last

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weekend, I was in square one mall and found your

store

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“cloth Capital” very interesting as the items are

cost effective

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and durable.

This

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is the

first

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time I visited your

store

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.I liked a light blue shirt with a flower near

pocket

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the pocket

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and it attracted me. When I tried, It

fit

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well on me. Might be due to that the strain mark was unnoticed. After coming home, I discovered

this

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strain mark inside of the shirt.

Then

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I went to your

store

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to return immediately. But sadly, that return of cloth is against

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store’s

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the store’s

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policy.

This

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was my

first

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time in the

store

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and while purchasing no one warn me about

this

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policy.I do have

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a receipt

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receipt

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receipts

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and tags hang on the shirt

also

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apply

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evidence of purchase. Kindly help me

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with

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return

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the return

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or refund policy. Your’s faithfully, Manaswini Mishra

Submitted by manaswini3 on Sat Nov 16 2019

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

169 words

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You recently bought an item of clothing from a shop. You discovered that it had a fault and returned it to the shop for replacement or refund. However, the assistant told you that this was against the store's policy. Write a letter to the store manager

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some countries have implemented mandatory community service programs for young people. In these programs, children aged 16 to 18 do charity work, help old people or work with animals. What are some advantages and disadvantages of this for young people?

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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or mall to do their shopping. Is this positive kr negative development?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?