Nowadays, people make new friends using social media and internet chat groups. Some of them believes that is good. Other people thinks that face-to-face conversation is beneficial. Discuss both sides.

In the past few
decades people
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decades, people
make
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made
new friends by using social networks and internet
chat
groups. Some of them think
this
is
acceptable but
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acceptable, but
others believe that face-to-face conversations
is
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are
beneficial. While I don't agree that making new friends through social networks are
good but
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good, but
I believe that there are some advantages for having a friend by social media.
Firstly
, making a friend utilizing social media can be
insecured
not firmly fastened or secured
unsecured
insecure
for our private life.
For example
, there are so many people in
socail
relating to human society and its members
social
networks that
use
other people's picture and show them as its their picture. We can't understand if they real or not they might persuade us.
In addition
, we upload our photos, opinions and videos to our social media accounts so others can see and
use
it against the others.
For instance
, if we start
to
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chatting
chat
with a stranger, they can
use
our hobbies and
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
stuff for
impress
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impressing
us and if we believe them, we are able to send some private
informations
a message received and understood
information
and pictures to them. Because of the fact that we sent the pictures by our hands, we did not have anything to do. In contrary, social media effects the society in a positive
way
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way, such
such
as they can meet new people in other foreign countries and
chat
with them where and whenever they want.
In
addition they
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addition, they
are able to develop not only our language
skills but
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skills, but
also
our self confidence with foreigners.
For instance
, the main problem of talking a foreign language is that people don’t want to talk if they aren’t a fluent and faultless person so that a person can
chat
and expand their language and vocabulary skills and
with
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by
using the video camera they can discuss some topics to be a more fluent speaker. To sum up, there are some pros and cos while using the social networks to make good
friends but
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friends, but
people must control their private life and do not share personal
informations
a message received and understood
information
to the
public but
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public, but
if they can
use
the social media beneficially, they can develop their personal skills by using it.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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