Teens spending more time with friends than families, is it good trend?

Now a days
Suggestion
Nowadays
, young adults like to spend more
time
with friends than with their family members.
Most probable reason
Suggestion
The most probable reason
for
this
change is social media and
video
games. In my opinion,
instead
of forcing, parents should guide their kids on how to spend less
time
on social media and
video
games and
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games, and
show them the importance of spending
time
with the family at
home
. In
this
era of social media and digital world, it is easier to get carried away,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
young adults. As per recent studies, social media sites like FB and Instagram are very addictive and young adults
are tend
Suggestion
tend
to get addicted to them very easily.
In addition
to social media sites, there are some
video
games like PUBG, which are highly addictive and many a times are harmful for our young generation. As these kids are spending more
time
on these activities, they are getting lesser
time
to spend with their families at
home
. Parents should not force their kids
to spend
Suggestion
spend
more
time
with the
family but
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family, but
rather guide them on how to involve themselves in doing some constructive activities,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
with the family. More
time
should be spent on outdoor activities and strict monitoring of each activity is to be done. The clear message should be conveyed to the kids about the importance of hanging out with the family at
home
. From
time
to
time
parents should plan trips and take the kids out and prove that, spending
time
with the family members is 100 times better and a lot fun than playing a PUBG game with some imaginary friends. In conclusion, the main reason for the less
time which
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time, which
our younger generation is getting to spend with the families at
home
is social media and the
video
games.
Instead
of forcing these kids to spend more
time
with the family, parents should monitor
kids
Suggestion
kids'
activities on social media and guide them on
time
management and to spend the
time
in a constructive manner.

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