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Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organizations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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The terms and conditions set by any
organization
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 for its employees are known as job requirements. In my opinion, physical
appearance
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 of officials in any
organization
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 is as important as their working skills during office hours. (36) We had seen in the past that there were no specific job requirements, like dress smartly, for people working in any
organization
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 excluding uniform positions. An employee had judged by his
work
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 rather than his outlook in the past. Presently, the employees are bound to follow certain dress codes and office rules in many organizations.
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, while hiring staff, the employers are
also
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 considering
applicants
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applicant's
 personality
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 to their academics and experiences.
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, physical
appearance
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 is treated exactly the same way as working abilities. (86) It has now become compulsory for a person, employed in a bank, hospital, shopping centre, government office or in any
organization
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, to look nice and smart as he has to interact with different people during
work
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 time. While
this
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 condition seems irrelevant for those working online on computers or employed in the production units of different organizations. In
such
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 situations, the quality of
work
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 has always given preference.
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, if the employers keep on improving their attitude towards professionalism,
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 it will become necessary for applicants in the near future to have
high
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higher
 qualifications as well as
pleasant personality
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a pleasant personality
 to meet requirements of certain jobs. (105)
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, in my opinion, both quality and
appearance
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 is important in the professional world. The quality of
work
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 surely boosts
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organization
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organization's
 reputation while
physical
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the physical appearance
appearance
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 builds our good impression among those people who have
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work
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worked
collaboration
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collaboratively
 with us. (38)

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