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The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six computer science subjects at a US university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives the statistics of male and female
research
students
 who studied six different computer science courses
in
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 a university
at
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United
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 States in 2011. (26)
Overall
, the
number
 of male
students
 was the highest in all the subjects except linguistics. In comparison,
maximum
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number
 of male
research
students
 studied psychology, natural sciences and mathematics in 2011.
While
equal
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number
 of male
research
students
 (150) were enrolled in both engineering and programming.
Moreover
, those male
students
 who studied linguistics were the least in figures, only 80.
On the other hand
, the proportion of female
research
students
 was the highest for natural sciences.
This
 figure declined to 175 for psychology and 125 for linguistics. For engineering and programming subjects, the
number
 of female
students
 was 90 and 80 respectively.
However
, only 40 females studied mathematics in 2011. (110) In conclusion, the
number
 of male and female
research
students
 fluctuated in all the computer science courses except natural sciences, for which
equal
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an equal
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number
 of male and female
students
 were registered in 2011. (33)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words research, students, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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