Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

There is no doubt that University learning plays a vital role in building a student's essential knowledge for his or her
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some people believe that only the
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students should be taught to them. I would rather insist that
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interest should be taken into account. On
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hand, there are some who believe that only
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approach to learning
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jobs.
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, those who studied only computer programming
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Profession irrespective of their core interests.
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they are passionate about are 40% more efficient
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just for their livelihood and not being passionate about it
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will eventually become mechanical and those beings will eventually not be able to contribute to
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society, the way they should
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In conclusion , considering the
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prospects of learning, it is my firm belief that one should grab knowledge as much as they can in the areas they are interested in during their tertiary education
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. It is a vital step in a goal to become a better human being which can ultimately lead to building a better society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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