Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believethat they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

There is no doubt that University learning plays a vital role in building a student's essential knowledge for his or her
future
prospects.
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some people believe that only the
subjects
which are required for a brighter
future
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students should be taught to them. I would rather insist that
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interest should be taken into account. On one hand, there are some who believe that only
future oriented
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approach to learning should be considered for a prosperous
future
as it will be helpful in grabbing
better paying
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jobs.
For example
, those who studied only computer programming
subjects
during their tenure, eventually end up with a career in Technical Profession irrespective of their core interests.
However
, If they had studied these
subjects
along with
their main
subjects
of interest, it might provide a better alternative to
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career
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.
On the other hand
, there are others who choose their passion as their profession. The reason they do
this
is that by following their heart, they will be more productive which ultimately leads to their efficiency at
workplace
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. To illustrate , a study conducted by Mind Forum agency states that people who are in the job profile
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they are passionate about are 40% more efficient than their peers who were not able to follow their passion.
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, the people who are doing
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just for their livelihood and not being passionate about it
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will eventually become mechanical and those beings will eventually not be able to contribute to
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society, the way they should be.... In conclusion , considering the
future
prospects of learning, it is my firm belief that one should grab knowledge as much as they can in the areas they are interested in during their tertiary education
itself
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. It is a vital step in a goal to become a better human being which can ultimately
leads
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to
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building
a better society.
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