Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believethat they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
There is no doubt that University learning plays a vital role in building a student's essential knowledge for his or her
future
prospects. Although
some people believe that only the Correct word choice
However
subjects
which are required for a brighter future
of
students should be taught to them. I would rather insist that Change preposition
for
candidate's
interest should be taken into account. On one hand, there are some who believe that only Correct article usage
the candidate's
future oriented
approach to learning should be considered for a prosperous Add a hyphen
future-oriented
future
as it will be helpful in grabbing better paying
jobs. Add a hyphen
better-paying
For example
, those who studied only computer programming subjects
during their tenure, eventually end up with a career in Technical Profession irrespective of their core interests. However
, If they had studied these subjects
along with
their main subjects
of interest, it might provide a better alternative to them
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their
in
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apply
career
. Fix the agreement mistake
careers
On the other hand
, there are others who choose their passion as their profession. The reason they do this
is that by following their heart, they will be more productive which ultimately leads to their efficiency at workplace
. To illustrate , a study conducted by Mind Forum agency states that people who are in the job profile Correct article usage
the workplace
which
they are passionate about are 40% more efficient than their peers who were not able to follow their passion. Correct word choice
that
As a consequence
, the people who are doing job
just for their livelihood and not being passionate about itFix the agreement mistake
jobs
,
will eventually become mechanical and those beings will eventually not be able to contribute to Remove the comma
apply
the
society, the way they should be.... In conclusion , considering the Correct article usage
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future
prospects of learning, it is my firm belief that one should grab knowledge as much as they can in the areas they are interested in during their tertiary education itself
. It is a vital step in a goal to become a better human being which can ultimately Correct pronoun usage
apply
leads
to Change the verb form
lead
bulding
a better society.Correct your spelling
building
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
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