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Many university graduates cannot find a job in their chosen profession. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, should be done about it?

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Universities play a major role in providing education to the students so that they can become successful in their lives by using the knowledge which they have acquired in the college or university.
However
, only graduation or a degree alone won't
gives
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give
 a job. As per the University Grants
Commision
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Commission
 of India only 20% of the young graduates rolled out from the colleges are selected in the companies. Let us discuss about some important points about what refraining graduates
from
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for
 jobs. The
first
 things
is
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are
 lack of soft skills which plays a vital role in the selection of a candidate by the companies. As most of the students are coming from the rural
background it's
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background, it's
 difficult for them to understand the subjects in the course.
Also
 universities become monotonous by giving only theoretical
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
 not practical knowledge to the young people. Labs and the library facilities are not suffice to the graduates in understanding the topics which are present in the semesters. Low standard of teaching is
also
 another reason of failure.
For
instance if
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instance, if
 we compare top universities in India like IIT with regional
universities we can
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universities, we can
 clearly perceive the difference. In my opinion, it's the
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 of both the government as well as the concerned
education
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educational
 bodies to take the above bottlenecks in universities in an earnest manner by providing adequate financial assistance and
upskilling
 the lectures and professors it's
have
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had
 a profound effect on the lives of the younger generation in the nation.
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