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It is believed that children from countries with a high level of unemployment should be offered only primary education and should not be offered secondary education as it is unlikely they will get a job in the future anyway. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is believed that children from countries with a high
level
 of
unemployment
 should be offered only primary
education
 and should not be offered secondary
education
 as it is unlikely they will get a
job
 in the
future
 anyway. Do you agree or disagree with
this
statement
?It is believed that children from countries with a high
level
 of
unemployment
 should be offered only primary
education
 and should not be offered secondary
education
 as it is unlikely they will get a
job
 in the
future
 anyway. Do you agree or disagree with
this
statement
?It is believed that children from countries with a high
level
 of
unemployment
 should be offered only primary
education
 and should not be offered secondary
education
 as it is unlikely they will get a
job
 in the
future
 anyway. Do you agree or disagree with
this
statement
?It is believed that children from countries with a high
level
 of
unemployment
 should be offered only primary
education
 and should not be offered secondary
education
 as it is unlikely they will get a
job
 in the
future
 anyway. Do you agree or disagree with
this
statement
?It is believed that children from countries with a high
level
 of
unemployment
 should be offered only primary
education
 and should not be offered secondary
education
 as it is unlikely they will get a
job
 in the
future
 anyway. Do you agree or disagree with
this
statement
?

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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