Some people feel that entretainers such as film maker ; pop musicians or sport stars are paid to much money. Do you agree ot disagree ? which other type of job should be highly paid ?

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Nowadays, it becomes common for a famous person to earn more than the normal range of salary of the country. I disagree because these people sell their image to brands,

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as L’oreal and Dior. They help these companies

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make

money. In

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of all, they advertise many logos. Generally, the main cause of their high salary is their international image.

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is used by some brands,

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as Coca-cola to sell their own products

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a bigger scale. These different companies

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from

selling their

articles earn

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articles, earn

billion dollars. I believe that

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is normal for the star to take a certain

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rate

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their income. Demi

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Lovato

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, advertises every day goods that she received from different companies. Only

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pictures

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picture

with

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manufacture help the producer to sell an important quantity of it.

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, fans who want to look like their

idole

a material effigy that is worshipped

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idols

are ready to buy everything.

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, famous people are currently considered like a Businessman.

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to their

advertise

give heed (to)

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for some industries. They sell their image through their own manufactured products.

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star

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, Selena Gomez starts to produce

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T-shirt and dolls, whereas Rihana has her own make-up brand.

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is their major source of income.

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, I am sure that people who work with them,

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as their driver or hairdresser could have a more important salary, because it is in a part thanks to them that they are famous.

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, I think the reason of their enhance income is normal, they just used their name to

built

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build

their company in order to earn more. In conclusion,

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famous people earn a lot. The main reasons are on the

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hand, they help international industries to market their articles and

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, they have their own business. For me, working

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an international scale does not have the same consequence than the national or local

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Some people feel that entretainers such as film maker ; pop musicians or sport stars are paid to much money. Do you agree ot disagree ? which other type of job should be highly paid ?

The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with the sentence?

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Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. Q: What is your opinion?

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it’s a positive or negative development?