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Some people believe that manufacture and supermarkets have the responsible to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. While others argue that customer should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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In recent
time
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times
, perishable and non perishable products are mostly delivered to the homes of consumers directly by the retail sellers or by the company producing it.And
this
require
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requires
multi layer
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a multi layer
 wrapping of plastics
,
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,
papers or wooden boxes to keep the
product
 safeguard from damage. Packing and keeping a
product
 secure from damage is observed as a basic need.
However
, many customers believe the better the packaging is the better the quality of
product
 beneath it.
For example
, many perishable items
such
 as sweet dishes, or fruits are mostly commonly packed in cardboard boxes and
then
 wrapped in multi layer of plastics.
This
 looks
attractive but
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attractive, but
 as plastic is a non biodegradable in nature and one of the pollutants.
Thus
, the usage of these
category
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categories
 of packaging must be eschewed. It earlier centuries of living the packaging of a
product
 was done meticulously and in
impeccable manner
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an impeccable manner
 by utilising biodegradable products
such
 as banana tree leaves
,
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,
or dried leaves of trees. To put in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that it a duty of every citizen of its nation and as well the organizations working and producing goods to minimize the usage of non
bio degradable
capable of being decomposed by e.g. bacteria
biodegradable
 items in packaging and encourage the usage of
bio degradable
capable of being decomposed by e.g. bacteria
biodegradable
 products that are not inimical to the environment.
Thus
, it will be win-win situation for the companies producing goods and
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 end users consuming the produced goods.
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