The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience , such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, the youths in majority are passing through a difficult phase due to lack of proper guidance and security at home. Some people believe that the cause for
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is due to involvement of
woman
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women
a woman
in different occupation and not being able to
spend quality of
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spend quality
time with her offspring. I completely agree with
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viewpoint, yet, I think it is
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important that
woman
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women
the woman
a woman
should
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
their career along with taking care of their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
children's
. The youngsters should be a major concern for the parents as it is a crucial period to determine whether they follow the right path or the wrong one. If not given emotional
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, they will face several consequences during
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time
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as juvenile delinquency.
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This, in
turn, ruins their
entire entire
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entire life
life
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leading to psychological issues like behavioural problems or cognitive impairment. Needless to say, mother plays a vital role in rendering enough care
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of
her
child
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, be it emotional or physical
attachment
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attached
. But, the mother
nowadays tend
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nowadays tends
to be busy in their official
work
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in order to
support
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financial situation of home along with her husband.
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,
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will
imabalance
a lack of balance or state of disequilibrium
imbalance
her professional and personal
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. To illustrate,
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
who lack proper
support
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from their parents can get involved in illegal acts
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as smoking, bullying, drug addicts and so on.
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why, parents must be
serious
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seriously
on these matters in order to
avoid
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avoid such problems
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problems to occur.
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, woman should equally
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
their career and maintain their
work
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life
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to keep self satisfied and happy. By balancing her
work
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life
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and personal
life
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, issues regrading
child
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's behaviour can be managed effectively.
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, she could spend time with her
child
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by taking him for outing to watch movies or have
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quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
extra fun playing along. Having said that, providing
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friendly environment with her
child
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will definitely help to maintain long lasting relationship and the
child
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will be less influenced to do any crimes with
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support
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. In conclusion, in order to protect teenagers from the problem of juvenile delinquency,
mother
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the mother
a mother
should be able to carry responsibility towards them fully, while still continuing her
work
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life
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • domestic roles
  • diverse professional engagements
  • dual-working parents
  • family dynamics
  • juvenile delinquency
  • societal and economic factors
  • dual-income households
  • childcare methods
  • community support systems
  • gender roles
  • family responsibilities
  • professional aspirations
  • development needs
  • correlation
  • simplistic causation
  • workplace policies
  • flexible hours
  • parental leave
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • successful womanhood
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