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The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience , such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, the youths in majority are passing through a difficult phase due to lack of proper guidance and security at home. Some people believe that the cause for
this
 is due to involvement of
woman
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women
a woman
 in different occupation and not being able to
spend quality of
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spend quality
 time with her offspring. I completely agree with
this
 viewpoint, yet, I think it is
also
 important that
woman
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women
the woman
a woman
 should
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
 their career along with taking care of their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
children's
. The youngsters should be a major concern for the parents as it is a crucial period to determine whether they follow the right path or the wrong one. If not given emotional
support
, they will face several consequences during
this
 time
such
 as juvenile delinquency.
This in
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This, in
 turn, ruins their
entire entire
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entire life
life
 leading to psychological issues like behavioural problems or cognitive impairment. Needless to say, mother plays a vital role in rendering enough care
to
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of
 her
child
, be it emotional or physical
attachment
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attached
. But, the mother
nowadays tend
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nowadays tends
 to be busy in their official
work
 in order to
support
 financial situation of home along with her husband.
Hence
,
this
 will
imabalance
a lack of balance or state of disequilibrium
imbalance
 her professional and personal
life
. To illustrate,
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 who lack proper
support
 from their parents can get involved in illegal acts
such
 as smoking, bullying, drug addicts and so on.
That is
 why, parents must be
serious
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seriously
 on these matters in order to
avoid
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avoid such problems
such
 problems to occur.
On the other hand
, woman should equally
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
 their career and maintain their
work
life
 to keep self satisfied and happy. By balancing her
work
life
 and personal
life
, issues regrading
child
's behaviour can be managed effectively.
For instance
, she could spend time with her
child
 by taking him for outing to watch movies or have
somr
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
 extra fun playing along. Having said that, providing
such
 friendly environment with her
child
 will definitely help to maintain long lasting relationship and the
child
 will be less influenced to do any crimes with
such
support
. In conclusion, in order to protect teenagers from the problem of juvenile delinquency,
mother
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the mother
a mother
 should be able to carry responsibility towards them fully, while still continuing her
work
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • domestic roles
  • diverse professional engagements
  • dual-working parents
  • family dynamics
  • juvenile delinquency
  • societal and economic factors
  • dual-income households
  • childcare methods
  • community support systems
  • gender roles
  • family responsibilities
  • professional aspirations
  • development needs
  • correlation
  • simplistic causation
  • workplace policies
  • flexible hours
  • parental leave
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • successful womanhood
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