Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is certainly understandable that
government
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should start looking at ways of improving their public facilities to a sustainable development.
Government
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have
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has
to make a real innovation in keeping the stability of the society, which means that people should get good service from their
government
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. There was a statement said that
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government
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the government
should utilise the
money
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for public importance, and do not use
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money
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for other things like arts (music and theatre). Personally, I disagree with that statement. In the following paragraphs, I will give my reasons to support my opinion. Nowadays, to face the period of development, as a
country
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they have to compete with other countries.
Arts
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The arts
can offer a positive contribution to the development of the quality of life as a
country
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. I believe that each
country
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has their
ability
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ability, then
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they can compete with the others.
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, recently there are some world competitions related to ‘singing’
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as World Choir Competition, ASIAN Idol, etc. Every
country
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sends their best participants to follow the competition. Two years ago, Indonesian delegate taking part in
World Choir Competition
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the World Choir Competition
held on 15–17 March 2013 at Belgium. They have to compete with 57 countries, and
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, they got gold medals for several categories.
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, I think that if a
government
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invests some
money
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to
arts sector
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the arts sector
, it will create many advantages for the
country
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itself.
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, Indonesia has talented people in painting field, it means that they can make a beautiful creation to sale. One of popular painting is ‘Monalisa’ drawing. The Painting already became
everlasting painting
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an everlasting painting
because it was drawn by the talented person, which the painter already creates many advantages for himself and his
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. Another essential thing is people have to make a good teamwork with the
government
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to produce huge advantages related to
arts
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artistic
art
creations. In conclusion, the
government
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should invest some
money
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to improve arts creation because it has a big opportunity to make a
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country more successful
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more successful country
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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