Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important for children's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?

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Art classes
such
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as painting and drawing plays a critical role in skill
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
skills
devlopment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
as equal as other subjects. I agree that utmost importance should be given to art classes and skills
such
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as drawing and painting which would enhance the creative part of the brain for the
kids which
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kids, which
is crucial as current situation not really allows children to explore the various
option
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options
and are very limited to book
reading which
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reading, which
should not be the case
,
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,
which would result in a safe
careeer
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
carrier
path but when
everone
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ever one
becomes a sheep where would the innovation rise from
?
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this
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This
is the place where art skills would be
helpfull
providing assistance or serving a useful function
helpful
and important in kindling the creative side of us which will make us not confined to what we know which is why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
wholeheartly
without reserve; without reservation
wholeheartedly
agree with the above statement.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Visual-spatial skills
  • Fine motor skills
  • Emotional expression
  • Creative thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Cultural awareness
  • Historical context
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Teamwork
  • Collaboration
  • Self-esteem
  • Sense of accomplishment
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