Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from instead of travelling to a workplace every day. Dou you think advantages of working from outweigh the disadvantages?

I think, it
depend
Suggestion
depends
on our current situation. So, our position, our
work
type etc.
For example
, you employee of a company, it’s important that what is your duties or daily workload.
Besides
, maybe you
work
alone or your
work
depend
Suggestion
depends
another departments. After
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
these, we can share our opinion about going to a
workplace
is better or not. Actually, I agree with
this
approach that employees worked
instead
of travelling to a
workplace
every day. That’s
way
Suggestion
the way
I need to write about
advantages
Suggestion
the advantages
of
worked
Suggestion
working
work
from
instead
of travelling to a
workplace
every day.
Firstly
, if we don’t go any
workplace
every day, it
mean
Suggestion
means
we can do everything nearly without losing a
time
. Now, I am showing some facts about it.
For example
, when we
needn’t go
Suggestion
didn’t go
did not go
are not going
aren’t going
to
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
, we don’t lose our
time
at
Suggestion
in
traffic each morning and after
work
.
Also
, we can do our personal works comfortless and without any permission.
In addition
, we can do a lot of activities more than we did in
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
,
also
we can see less stress, which is in
workplace
at working
time
you can come face to face
this situations
Suggestion
this situation
these situations
a lot.
Besides
, we can get fresh weather more than
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
a workplace
, of
course if
Accept comma addition
course, if
workplace
located in some closed building.
However
, we will not feel in a cage. All of
this
our benefits about healthy life. In conclusion, we can manage our
time
perfectly and we can do relax which
time
we need. At least, I would like
add
Suggestion
to add
one sentence that, of course it will be easy for you if you have enough profit without going
workplace
.
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