Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. - Do you agree or disagree? - Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A fixed
retirement
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age
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for all
employee
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employees
, regardless of occupation is thought to be unfair by some people. An earlier
retirement
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age
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and pensionary benefits to certain workers is expected.
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essay agrees with the above fact and discusses the workers of mentally and physically
laborous
characterized by effort to the point of exhaustion; especially physical effort
laborious
task and
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emphasized
emphasizes
emphasize
the necessity to get the early
retirement
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benefit. Our system allows a
retirement
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age
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of 60 years and a minimum service length of 10 years for becoming eligible to receive pensionary benefit.
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is done both for equality and getting the maximum output from a trained employee.
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, it is unfair to assess all people by same perspective.
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, employees working in hazardous environment
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as mines, radioactive
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an area that is approximately central within some larger region
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are facing
a greater threat to their life due to exposure to
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hazardous condition for an extended duration than other normal people would in their lifetime. Certain
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sections
of employees
are constantly exposed
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is constantly exposed
to a greater threat both mentally and physically. These involve teachers who work under mental pressure and those workers who work in different mines and radioactive or nuclear power station and facilities. The latter
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is exposed
to
condition
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conditions
a condition
, where a normal human life is affected to a higher degree. In
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case, an early
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is necessary for their life. According to a recent study, the workers of a steel industry
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are
more likely to have noise induced permanent threshold shift, which causes permanent
deafning
any process serving to define the shape of something
defining
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, mainly due to the constant exposure to
noisy environment
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a noisy environment
. In conclusion, it is believed by some people that a fixed
retirement
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age
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for everyone is unfair and some workers need to be retired earlier.
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essay agrees to the fact that some employees, owing to their mental and physiological hardship in extreme environment need to get early
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.
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