In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

In the modern
society many
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society, many
peopel
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
try to look for different
job
which they
didnot experenced
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did not experience
did not experenced
have not experienced
did not experienced
didnot experienced
didnot experience
before, I will discuss what is
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the reason
reason
a reason
reasons
resin
why and is it a demerit or merit
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connects a noun with the preceding word
of
to
out
our
society
It
is commenly taking
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commonly takes
is commonly taking
is communally taking
place that many people to
change
their
job
, even though usually it is not easy and constantly difficult, so our question started from why,. At
first
reason
is sometimes
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is, sometimes
they do not have another option.
For example
, many people have to resign their
work wheather
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work, whether
work whether
want or not because of
employer
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the employer
or company policy. It means they cannot continue their career. The
second
reason is
chance
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the chance
. There is
huge number
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a huge number
of new
job
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jobs
which we did not imagine in the
past
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past, such
such
as Internet marketing
,
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,
uber
at a higher position than
over
taxi
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taxis
a taxi
, and
airbnb
.
Therefore
, people have more
opportuinty
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
to
change
their
job
The
last
reason is individual
choosies
an occurrence of something
cases
chooses
courses
, Many People have hard time to find
work
that
first
them If they cannot enjoy their
work
it might push them to
change
their
work
.
Otherwise
, it
is complicate
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is complicated
to
justifiy
show to be reasonable or provide adequate ground for
justify
if it is positive or negative
for
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in
our
society
because it can be both.
However
, I believe changing career has some good to our
society
. In the modern
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
, many people have to
faced
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face
with taxation in working place It caused a lot of stress. If people cannot
setisfied
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satisfy
satisfied
their
job
it could be a
proplem
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problem
for
ouor
of or belonging to us
our
your
siciety
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
either
then
, stay the same position for a long time does not
means
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mean
they have loyalty.
sometimes
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Sometimes
it means low motivation or afraid of
challanging
requiring full use of your abilities or resources
challenging
. In conclusion,
Actually there
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Actually, there
is nothing wrong to
change
their
job
even several times. Because it is personal choice and
then
if can make collaboration in different experience from various
job
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jobs
for
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in
our
society
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • establish
  • identity
  • influence
  • social media
  • digital communication
  • commitments
  • pressure
  • academic
  • profession
  • prioritize
  • cultural shifts
  • societal shifts
  • peer relationships
  • emotional support
  • guidance
  • voluntary
  • autonomy
  • balance
  • resilient
  • overbearing
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