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Today much of the food people eat gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In todays
world
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 of technology, it would not be wrong to say that
he
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his
world
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 has become one global village. Everything has become closer and with that,
food
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 habits have
also
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 changed. The advancement of shipping industry has made sure that anything can be sent from one part of
thr
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the
their
world
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 to the other in a time span of 50-60 days maximum. Everything has become more closer, it's easier to travel from one place to another. With
this
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 flow of information across the globe, people want to have access to things from the different parts of the
world
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. The things which were not available in their part of the
world
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 during certain periods, now they have access to them by importing from other origins.
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, people are eating those
food
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 items which they
can not
can not
cannot
 grow in their countries. Adding to that, there is no concept of seasonal
food
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 items as people have access to them year round from various origins.
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, the effects of these changes has gradually
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been
 seen
on
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in
 the environment and
economy
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the economy
. From my experience of working in the fresh produce business and being responsible for global trade of fresh produce, I can say that huge amount of costs
are being paid
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is being paid
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 to the impact on
enevironment
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the environment
environment
. IMO 2020 is the step in the same direction to reduce these changes by making fuel more cleaner and by putting
restriction
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restrictions
a restriction
 on the sulphur discharge in the oceans. But what
this
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 has enabled is for the farmers across different countries who produces in excess to sell
thier
of them or themselves
their
 goods for pennies in their country to export and make a good living for themselves. In the end, I would
say
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say, although
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 it is very
diffuicult
not easy; requiring great physical or mental effort to accomplish or comprehend or endure
difficult
difficulty
 to go back and consume only locally sourced
food
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 items. But, we should
atleast
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at least
 try to do that as far as possible and minimize the impact
on
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of
 that on our environment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • local economy
  • food security
  • supply chain disruptions
  • cultural heritage
  • farming practices
  • nutritional value
  • local food systems
  • imported goods
  • economies of scale
  • environmental benefits
  • transportation
  • community support
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