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Some people like to attend big parties with strangers,while others like to attend small parties with families and friends.

Nowadays,
people
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 tend to throw
parties
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 for special occasions.Attending
to
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a
party
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 can change our mood and
brings
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bring
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 us happiness.A great number of
people
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 would like to participate in a big
party
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 which
include
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 many
people
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 who are strangers
for
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 them,
whereas
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 others believe that a small
party
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 with
families
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 and
friends
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 is pleasant.
People
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 in the first group prefer to attend large
parties
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 with many
pepper
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people
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 who are not familiar with them.They can find new
friends
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 and
striking
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 up
friendship
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friendships
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 for
theirselves
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themselves
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.Take a graduation
party
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 as an example,when you attend
this
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party
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 you can see so many
friends
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 who you can get in touch with
them
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and
giving
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 their contact.
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,these
parties
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 help
people
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 to broaden their friendships significantly.
Party
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 in the second group tend to attend
the
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parties
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 which include their
families
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 and close
friends
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 because
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thay
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they
 think when
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thay
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they
 are with their close
friends
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,
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thay
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they
 have a wide range of
same
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similar
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 hobbies which can share with them comfortably.
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that
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 is to say,when you attend a friend's
party
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 you can wear a casual dress and have more fun together.
for instance
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,
last
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 night,I attended a birthday
party
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 which included my school
friends
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 in order to recall memorable experiences which we had in school we dressed up very simply and drank so much.It was an enjoyable time for us.
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,both views are commonly held in society.some
people
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 want to have new
friends
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 so
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thay
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they
 attend a big
party
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 with new
people
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.The majority of
people
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 being with their
families
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 and close
friends
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 is their
preferences
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preference
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,
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because
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thay
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they
 have many same hobbies.In my view,
although
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people
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 can find
friends
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in
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at
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 big
parties
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,small
parties
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 with
the
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families
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is
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are
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 better for me.
Due to
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 more hobbies with
families
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 and
friends
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.

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task response
Ensure to have a clear thesis statement at the beginning of the essay to clearly indicate your stance on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Work on providing a more structured introduction and conclusion to frame your arguments effectively.
task response
Good use of examples to support your points about attending different types of parties.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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