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Success is often measured in terms of how much money somebody has earned. Do you think wealth is a goo measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not

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Money is an economical unit
that is
 generally recognised. It can be measured in terms of the goods and services people afford depending on their
source
 of
income
. A good measure of
success
 can be seen in two ways, Financial and nonfinancial, I think the not having money is a good way of categorized as a successful individual.
On the other hand
, someone can itemize
success
 as doing good deeds to others.
Firstly
, wealth might not be a good measure of
success
. Because not all rich persons are successful. Some of the richest non-challant attitude cannot control their resources or fame. An example is a recent advert seen in the newspaper of a helpless man that earns a high salary and suddenly lost all his
source
 of
income
 is currently hopeless and looking for all ends means to sustain his life.
Secondly
, there are other ways to identify whether a person is wealthy or not.
This
 will be by showing some good deeds to the homeless and the needy.
This
 method portrays a hundred percent characteristic of the person and can easily be
identifed
having the identity known or established
identified
 by the public.
On the other hand
, rich people do not solely depend on their
income
, but rather have other
source
 of
income
 that can sustain them and their unborn children.
For instance
 a recent trend of a philanthropist and lecturer man became so successful even without having enough
source
 of
income
. In conclusion, while
success
 might be measured to what most people earn.
This
 might not be a means to become successful, but rather showing a helping
hands
Suggestion
hand
 to others can portray a successful person.
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